Give me your brutally honest opinion?

There's definetly depth in these lines. My focus is on the 10th line, because "the" is not capitalized, wheras the other lines are. Is this emphasis intentional? zephyr is may be meant as an automobile, driving fast, but I looked at Wikipedia and Zephyr is a greek god and they're noticed by their weather/season conditions, this describes an intense speed of zephyr. there's a deeper meaning to Zephyr in relation to Odysseus. In the second stanza, you're describing plot really well with great descriptive words. The use of "mire" is effective. In the third stanza, there's a seemingly contradiction, because sunshine under wrists shouldn't be followed by fragile and weak. Yet, this contradiction adds layers to the poem. This contradiction works. And the rest of the lines in that stanza are interpretable (in relation to how the pieces fit together in other lines), which does get the reader thinking. Yus, this works too. The ending is effective. You don't reveal information that's closing, so you keep your reader purging. Overall, this poem works.